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Anyone who's willing, I would appreciate comments on the ending, in particular, of a song I posted "First Times." I have had several different interpretations suggested to me, some completely different from what my intention had been. I'm still working on it so the version posted is a rather rough working cut, as am hoping to get further ideas/suggestions and continue refining. So I would be interested to know how the ending strikes you - any other comments, too of course, that anyone would be willing to share. Thanks for any responses - via song Comments space or email - sharon.osuna@yahoo.com. Thanks again.

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Let me tell ya...

Late last night, in the midst of a good dream
I was startled awake, shaken by something
It might have been, ..Long Rollin' Thunder,
But it sounded like a Harley.............To Me .

I hope this helps.
( Great song my friend )

.......= drawn out ( pause, silence, or note sustained )


You could add the sound effects of either ---Thunder or Harley.
At the point of mention ( which would be ..."Long Rollin' Thunder")
or , as a fade at the end.

( You write this chorus right, and it could be a Harley Commercial - jingle or slogan)

-- Edited by jeff at 21:39, 2008-03-15

-- Edited by jeff at 21:45, 2008-03-15

-- Edited by jeff at 21:53, 2008-03-15

-- Edited by jeff at 21:54, 2008-03-15

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Thank you, Jeff; as always, very thoughtul and interesting perspective, and I appreciate your taking the time to convey these ideas to me.

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